WALT - We are learning to write,edit and re craft our writing.
To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page. Then I wrote my story an underneath. The
green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what mr masters helped me
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green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what mr masters helped me
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cosin.
Breaking bons
4 wheeler
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tow of my cousins came up for the holidays. They wanted to go on the 4
Two
wheeler. My dad let them. But my cousin broke 1 of his wrists. It was sade.
one sad
I will tell you the store. He was going over the bridge. We have 3 bridges.
stoy three
1 is scene. 2 are fat. He went over 1 of the fat ones.
one two one
Than he hit a bit of congckerit. He couldn't ster
Then Concrete
the 4 wheeler! He jomt of it! The 4 wheeler crashes into a tree. He is
jumped off crashed was
locke to be alive because he neele drove into a drain that is vere depe.
lucky nearle very deep
That reminds me of when we tjockt a doll in the drain. It was fun we sade
chucked sad
to tova (my sister) that it was swimming in the drain and it wanted to go
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fishing. Than we frod it in bamboo trees and it got stuck up in there, than
threw then
when it came done it landed in dog poop. Than we celendet it in the drain.
Then cleaned
He got clen soprisingle. Than the doll did tricks on the trampoline.
Clean
Clean couldn’t threw then very deep concrete
Jumped off lucky nearly Chucked crashed
Story sad one two three surprisingly was
I liked doing this work. It was fun because I could tell the whole world about my holiday.
What was your favourite part? I hope you liked it.
